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Take my hand by ~lost16:iconlost16:

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When your world starts to fall apart,
or when you've had one too many broken hearts,
know that I've been doing my part;
only been trying to help you from the start.

For the times you feel you'll go insane,
and you have no one to blame,
I'll be sure to get rid of your pain.

I'll be sure all your heartaches are gone,
and that you'll always have a shoulder to cry on.
So take my hand,
and take a stand,
against the hurt,
and let me be your comfort.

And when this fairy tale of yours
becomes a once-upon-a-time,
accept my beautiful lures,
to make your heart belong with mine.
©2006-2009 ~lost16
:iconlost16:

Author's Comments

A couple of my closests friends are all going through some kind of drama in their lives right now, and its just making me feel so bad, and i just want to take their pain away.

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~blue-star17 Nov 2, 2006, 7:43:00 PM
beautiful :D

--
you and me couldn't stand being normal
that's why we make a good you and me.
<3

:iconlost16:
~lost16 Nov 2, 2006, 8:03:29 PM
oh wow. thank you. :aww:
:iconblue-star17:
~blue-star17 Nov 2, 2006, 9:31:15 PM
you're welcome :]
I know how it is to have friends go through drama and you just want to make their hurting stop.

--
you and me couldn't stand being normal
that's why we make a good you and me.
<3

:iconlost16:
~lost16 Nov 3, 2006, 3:51:25 PM
yeah it sucks... thanks again :) you made my day a whole lot better ...but also i really dont think that this poem deserves much praise, its not that good...=\
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~buurden Nov 4, 2006, 12:37:09 PM
NICEEE POEMMM!! see you are good at poetry, at least wayyyy better then me =D but yea, i guess its true a lot of us are going through a tuff time, but yea this poem is very good =D

wooooww still amazed at how good this is, and thoughfull lol

but yea y u feel so bad that were goign through tuff times??
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~lost16 Nov 4, 2006, 5:56:42 PM
lol u think this is good??????? =|
lmao uve got to be kidding me... ur poems are wayyyyyyyyyy better. like seriously. lol i didnt even wanna put this poem up cuz it would seem so amateur-ish compared to urs. lol

and i just feel bad, cuz i do. i hate seeing everyone so depressed, i just hate it. like all of my closests friends are so sad lately, its just rubbing off on me and making me sad. so yeah, i dont like seeing u guys get hurt...
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~buurden Nov 5, 2006, 11:08:14 AM
r u kidding that is way betetr then mine
wayy wayy betetr

well i wouldnt say all ur lcosests are friends are sad lately at least i dont think soo.
wwell noooow i feel bad for makin u feel sad :(
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~lost16 Nov 5, 2006, 5:01:52 PM
not eveennn. its not even close to urs. it cant touch urs, cuz urs is soo much better. this is not even worth being compared to urs. like seriously.

and pretty much all of my closests friends are....
and dont feel bad! cuz ur not making me feel bad, like i said. dont feel bad at all. happy happy happeeeeee :)
:iconbuurden:
~buurden Nov 12, 2006, 9:49:17 AM
okk happe happe happpppe =) lol but yea ur poem s much much beter way way better lol
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